Thread:EternalLocket/@comment-5774380-20150424125142/@comment-5774380-20150424155058

I understand, sometimes sentences just become too long and tiresome to read; but those periods there also seem odd to me. When someone is reading a text and finds a period, this means the previous idea ended and a new one is beginning; but in those sentences, you read the first part, pause, read the second part, and you don't realize it was the same sentence until you note that the second part makes no sense by itself.

I suggest to use the punctuaction marks as they are intended to be: commas to make short breaks between parts of the same sentence; semicolons to make larger breaks, and periods to separate independent sentences.

In the case of that paragraph in Ymir's page, a better division could be as follows:

''When Ymir and Eren Yeager are kidnapped by Reiner and Bertolt after the revelation of their identities, Ymir states that the Beast Titan is directly responsible for the appearance of Titans within Wall Rose';  possibly in order to "test" humanity's strength.   She also notes' that the reaction of Reiner and Bertolt to its appearance resembled gawking, excited children.

"When this happened this  a related idea (.) a more unrelated idea that can work independently."

That's more comfortable to read and doesn't feel so unnatural, don't you think?