Thread:EternalLocket/@comment-5774380-20150424125142/@comment-24930713-20150424133715

I thought about rewriting the sentences in general and ended up forgetting it and moving on to something else. But sometimes they, the Beast Titan edit specifically, are in my opinion run on sentences. They just go on and on, to the point where they become lists when they shouldn't be.

I certainly should have rewrote Flagon's sentence, if not that whole little section, I didn't really like how it sounded before. It was about Flagon, but didn't seem all that connected to me to begin with. But a lot of people keep using commas to break up there sentences. It's distracting, especially when there's more than two that aren't for the purpose of making a list. And according to the edit history, I'm the one who gave it it's wonky punctuation. I really didn't want to seem like one of those people following and "correcting" someone's edits soon after they make them. So I was trying not to change it too much. Or reword it in a way that it lost it's original meaning from whoever added it.

But Flagon's edit is certainly one I occasionally think about. Considering I'm making my way towards updating the spinoff sections.